New Blue Sun Feature: Design Critiques!
There is no better cure for depleted creative stores than to take a little break. We hope your winter respite was as refreshing as ours and that you find your new year beginning with a burst of fire.
During the time off, I had a chance to make some new friends on Facebook with a couple of excellent Indie author/publisher groups (click here and here to visit them). In keeping with my theory that there is no such thing as accidents, I'm sure the Universe played a big part in leading me to these folks.
What I noticed is Indie authors are truly independent in more ways than just writing. They're bold pioneers, moving forward into this new frontier of self-publishing and in that spirit, want to do as much of their own production work as they possibly can.
No one starts out as an expert. We all begin as...well...beginners. Sometimes we're lucky enough to find a kind-hearted mentor who takes us under their wing and points us in the right direction. Other times, we muddle through countless hours of frustrating trial and error to learn what we need to know.
I've done both and now it's time to give back a little for all those times I did find a teacher.
One of the biggest topics for Indies is cover design. Today marks the start of a brand new feature on Blue Sun Studio: Design Critique.
How does this work? You send us your book cover image, or website address, or that ebook you've been working on, or whatever design project you've got going on and we'll give you a critique. Keep in mind, we don't hold back here at Blue Sun. We give the good with the bad all to help you improve. We'll even give technical advice if you're stuck and want to know how to get a certain effect in Photoshop, or how to fix that wonky spacing on your website. Just ask.
And what if you just have a question? Write to us about that too. We'd be happy to include it in a post.
Now, let's have some fun...
Dralin by John H. Caroll
Our first cover is for a fantasy novel called Dralin, by John H. Caroll. The summary of the book is as follows:
There are many cities in the world of Ryallon that know the touch of despair and evil, but none like Dralin. Towers of wizards rise high into the air, shrouded in the mists of magical smog. Poor sleep in the alleyways, becoming deformed by pollution. Life is short for many.
Throughout all of it, the cunning and dangerous members of the City Guard do their best to keep evil and crime from destroying the citizens of Dralin. Trained to fight in streets that make no sense, they keep wickedness from taking over completely.
A young woman fleeing her past makes Dralin her destination. A young Guardsman with his own dark history hopes to make a difference in a city that is without hope. Are sorrow and despair their only destiny, or can love redeem them? Two young girls raised in this city learn life's hard lessons early. Will they be defeated by its evil?
Underneath the city lie hidden dangers even more terrible than those that lurk in its dark streets. Ancient ruins of civilizations past still hold onto the memories of how grand they once were, while menacing creatures hope for a tasty meal to venture into their domain.
The Dralin Trilogy is a dark, swords-and-sorcery fantasy series following the lives of a few unusual individuals as they desperately try to survive in the sinister city of Dralin.
The first glance at the cover (click the image on the right to enlarge) shows a sense of darkness and mystery. I want to know who that young woman is and what's behind that door. The image has an overall woodcut feel to it that could work for the fantasy genre, but is it enough to tell the reader this is indeed a fantasy? With all the texture going on, it's a little chaotic for the eye. Where does the reader look first? What's the main focal point? What's the story? Is it a retelling of Little Red Riding Hood?
The font suggests fantasy, however, the title is a little hard to read with the wispy flourishes, especially when it gets reduced down to thumbnail size. Adding some space between the letters instead of having them so close together would help. The "r" is fine, but the "alin" after that needs some breathing room.
We took a look at John's other covers as well. He has a lot of them. Someone's been busy writing! Throughout his work as a whole there's a tendency to place the text a little too close to the top and bottom of the book. The same thing happens here with Dralin.
One suggestion would be to move the background image down a touch, maybe the same amount of space between the bottom of his name and the bottom edge of the book. The idea is to get that much space along the top. If that's where the image cuts off, we would do a fade to the darkest color in the image. Then the book's title could be brought down, and centered, to give it some breathing room without having it layer over the woman's head.
We could take that a step further and move the woman down enough to include the subtitle in one straight line under the title. If John does that, we would also suggest using a sans serif font for it so it's more readable. I'd also play with a solid color on the subtitle, maybe a shade of gold pulled from the main title. The outline effect may not be needed anymore either. That's one of those things you'd have to see to decide for sure.
Now, what to do about the battle between the metallic effect and the woodsy background? Removing the gradient effect would decrease the busyness going on with the text. A solid color would be easier on the eye and help to create a focal point. Choosing the brighter gold in the letters would work well.
For the most part, John's done a good job of choosing colors that grab the eye. That red on the hood will catch someone's attention for sure. This cover also does well creating a specific mood, it's definitely mysterious and secretive. You can feel the woman's desperation. We want to know if she's running away from danger or running into it once she gets past that door.
Which will it be? You'll have to read Dralin to find out.
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About John:
John H. Carroll was the youngest of seven children and was born in Atlanta, Georgia in 1970 where he was kept in a dresser drawer with the clean socks. Luckily he wasn't kept with the dirty socks or else he might have grown up to become slightly warped.
As a child, John spent most of his time wandering through the Mojave Desert in an attempt to avoid people. He would stare at the sky, imagining what it would be like to explore different worlds. One of his favorite memories is watching his dad build the fuselage of Evel Kneivel's skycycle in their garage. One of his least favorite moments was watching that skycycle fall into the Snake River. (Not his dad's fault and he has documentation to prove it, so nyah)
As a teenager, John spent most of his time driving wherever he could in an attempt to avoid people. He would stare at the road, imagining what it would be like to explore different worlds. He was the captain of the chess team and lettered in golf and band while in high school and wasn't beaten up anywhere near as much as one might imagine.
As an adult, John spent most of his time staring at a computer screen in an attempt to avoid people. He stares at the monitor for hours, imagining what it would be like to explore different worlds. He has been married to his wonderful wife for 14 years and they have three obnoxio . . . wonderful children who always behave . . . when they're asleep.
John is surrounded at most times by emo bunny minions. He is their imaginary friend and they look to him for guidance. At one point they took over the world. No one noticed because they left everything exactly as it was. They gave the world back after a week because it was depressing.
Dralin is available at Amazon, Barnes & Noble and Smashwords
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